tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7689587591545890630.post6697946673807631935..comments2024-01-14T06:41:33.675-05:00Comments on Lisa M Potts: Show Me Yours BlogfestLisa Pottshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11676087488599338569noreply@blogger.comBlogger26125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7689587591545890630.post-43269388827447231902011-01-06T08:49:03.828-05:002011-01-06T08:49:03.828-05:00This seems like a good start.This seems like a good start.PT Dillowayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09394481476862013009noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7689587591545890630.post-8300731967989245322011-01-05T06:20:18.204-05:002011-01-05T06:20:18.204-05:00Oh, snap, love it. What great voice!
But what ha...Oh, snap, love it. What great voice!<br /><br />But what happens next? WHAT?Amie Kaufmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15116472165351759477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7689587591545890630.post-37464217678149794092011-01-04T00:59:09.173-05:002011-01-04T00:59:09.173-05:00I love, love, love this: "Warren stood behind...I love, love, love this: "Warren stood behind me, next to our lockers, and I knew what the sound of his inhaler meant."<br /><br />Great excerpt!Carolinehttp://www.untitlement.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7689587591545890630.post-70364414703280077842011-01-04T00:03:56.683-05:002011-01-04T00:03:56.683-05:00OMG great voice, RIGHT from the beginning. I can h...OMG great voice, RIGHT from the beginning. I can hear the MG perfectly. It was somehow cute yet interesting and serious. Thank you for sharing!Jessica Silvahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15405267450788581689noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7689587591545890630.post-31163465382234955122011-01-03T22:02:21.188-05:002011-01-03T22:02:21.188-05:00I love that your MC has a great vocab and uses it ...I love that your MC has a great vocab and uses it to insult the people who aren't as smart as she is. <br /><br />Beautiful voice too.<br /><br />JJodi Henryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03216373059861459896noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7689587591545890630.post-77897399077782421282011-01-03T21:57:57.426-05:002011-01-03T21:57:57.426-05:00Gosh, I couldn't find the comments for a while...Gosh, I couldn't find the comments for a while...but I figured it out eventually...<br /><br />Love the line against the queen bee! Yay for smart girls. :)Summer Freyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04234534550255682010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7689587591545890630.post-29321750027975761842011-01-03T20:16:10.206-05:002011-01-03T20:16:10.206-05:00Love your MC - she has so much spunk and attitude....Love your MC - she has so much spunk and attitude. Great opening - pulls you in. Great job!S.A.Husseynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7689587591545890630.post-88760221243349448412011-01-03T20:00:43.958-05:002011-01-03T20:00:43.958-05:00Ha! I love myself a spunky heroine :) I like her a...Ha! I love myself a spunky heroine :) I like her already.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17034419617457525778noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7689587591545890630.post-64683105898626152122011-01-03T18:32:27.268-05:002011-01-03T18:32:27.268-05:00I liked this opening! I think you should keep it,...I liked this opening! I think you should keep it, or something very much like it. Thanks for sharing!Elizabeth Twisthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03133959633383307056noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7689587591545890630.post-58134806701084610662011-01-03T18:22:09.041-05:002011-01-03T18:22:09.041-05:00Great characters - I've got a great sense for ...Great characters - I've got a great sense for 4 of them in this little space - well done :)Jemi Fraserhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02214408467456320167noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7689587591545890630.post-40488466941047154432011-01-03T17:10:37.875-05:002011-01-03T17:10:37.875-05:00Witty dialogue, you get right into character right...Witty dialogue, you get right into character right away. I enjoyed the read. thanks for postingSummer Rosshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08122694893668693244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7689587591545890630.post-11242417550849404692011-01-03T16:46:15.557-05:002011-01-03T16:46:15.557-05:00My immediate response to the first sentence: "...My immediate response to the first sentence: "Why would anybody wanna be a loser? ;)"<br />I liked Roxanne. Didn't quite understand what the pig-kissing reference was all about, but that's not a big deal.<br />And I think that summer with Granny may be something very different from despair!<br />Thanks for sharing this excerpt with us all.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7689587591545890630.post-42955275604618222172011-01-03T15:18:03.020-05:002011-01-03T15:18:03.020-05:00Terrific voice!Terrific voice!Alison Pearce Stevenshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00955543150406880055noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7689587591545890630.post-68829493351435223362011-01-03T14:42:57.399-05:002011-01-03T14:42:57.399-05:00I love the voice of the character! Great excerpt/b...I love the voice of the character! Great excerpt/blogfest post!Golden Eaglehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08721520451194318436noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7689587591545890630.post-2718009887152355762011-01-03T14:04:38.348-05:002011-01-03T14:04:38.348-05:00Love your MCs voice and she sounds very authentica...Love your MCs voice and she sounds very authentically 12 (which isn't easy) so great job! I'd definitely like to read more!Hart Johnsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17599570189253229318noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7689587591545890630.post-62185967012244095302011-01-03T13:32:54.243-05:002011-01-03T13:32:54.243-05:00The MC's voice stands out throughout! Great jo...The MC's voice stands out throughout! Great job! I want to know where the paranormal stuff comes in!<br /><br />Thank you for joining us!Hannahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16915603693944523761noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7689587591545890630.post-14332968871823752992011-01-03T12:21:10.138-05:002011-01-03T12:21:10.138-05:00I love it! Particularly enjoyed the part where Abi...I love it! Particularly enjoyed the part where Abigail can't figure out what the MC just called her. nice!Rebecca T.https://www.blogger.com/profile/11994380364321336824noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7689587591545890630.post-19928206315662687212011-01-03T10:34:20.489-05:002011-01-03T10:34:20.489-05:00ooh this is excellent! The voice is super strong a...ooh this is excellent! The voice is super strong and i definitely want to read more. 500 words was not enough for your exceprt.<br />Great job!Sarah Ahiershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02795455714801965956noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7689587591545890630.post-71932683031256475602011-01-03T10:20:13.138-05:002011-01-03T10:20:13.138-05:00Wonderful! I lost track of hoe many snickers you g...Wonderful! I lost track of hoe many snickers you got from me! Love it. Hope to hear more of this granny and sassy gal in the future!Colene Murphyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06086195075690893194noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7689587591545890630.post-16885985373692374552011-01-03T09:19:33.950-05:002011-01-03T09:19:33.950-05:00I can really see your character's personality ...I can really see your character's personality here. What a great scene.Kari Mariehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04404956407734167300noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7689587591545890630.post-52384932914869551062011-01-03T09:14:17.773-05:002011-01-03T09:14:17.773-05:00I really enjoyed the exchange. Abigail's mean!...I really enjoyed the exchange. Abigail's mean! :( Great little excerpt.J.C. Martinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01567971311643106302noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7689587591545890630.post-84579556709909868342011-01-03T08:41:27.335-05:002011-01-03T08:41:27.335-05:00Great hook right from the beginning. You certainl...Great hook right from the beginning. You certainly had me engaged and I wanted to keep reading.<br /><br />I'd venture that this is a keeper. Thanks for sharing it!Jon Paulhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07824815967445843124noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7689587591545890630.post-26557281907394565502011-01-03T08:14:35.465-05:002011-01-03T08:14:35.465-05:00I like this opening; it's straight in with the...I like this opening; it's straight in with the action and a great scene. Love your writing.Ellie Garratthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03731071128348213067noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7689587591545890630.post-72899928353184537002011-01-03T05:39:17.096-05:002011-01-03T05:39:17.096-05:00I think you should definitely keep this. I love th...I think you should definitely keep this. I love the sassiness of the MC. Great, Lisa.Denise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7689587591545890630.post-70061964839818988042011-01-03T05:16:12.527-05:002011-01-03T05:16:12.527-05:00That's a great excerpt, grabs you into the sto...That's a great excerpt, grabs you into the story and leaves you wanting more!Margo Bensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06759845391358543223noreply@blogger.com